Monday, 15 September 2014

Shared Reading

The Seagull Sponge
W.A.L.T: identify techniques the author uses to make a normal, everyday event sound exciting.

Room 4 Predictions:
  1. Sea Gull eating sponge.
  2. Something to do with Sea Gulls.
  3. Feeding the Sea Gulls.
  4. Visiting the beach and a Sea Gull follows them home.
  5. Sponge cake.
  6. Baking a cake and calling it The Sea Gulls Sponge.
  7. Pet Sea Gulls.
  8. Day at the beach.
  9. Sponge Fish.
  10. Find an injured Sea Gull. 

The best bits of descriptive detail:
  • Peered at the greenish yellow slim that had once been called yolk.
  • I yelled at as the birds readied to plummet towards our head.
  • We waved sticks of Manauku in the air and inched our way towards land.
  • Aunt Nells eyes narrowed with suspicion
  • The gulls attacked like a rain of bullets.
  • They began peeling off and plummeting towards us. 
  • I retrieved my hat and rammed it down to my ears.
  • I grabbed his hand and dragged him along, his feet barely touching the ground. 
  • I surged across the channel. 
  • Jacob plonked down on the sand, refusing to move.
Words that suited the style of writing and were good choices:
  1. Raking- Draw together with a rake.
  2. Lurched-Uncontrolled movement.
  3. Colony- A group of people (or birds).
  4. Readied- Prepared.
  5. Suspicion - Curious. 
  6. regarded- to look upon.
  7. casualties-injuries.
  8. cringed-body hunches.
  9. plonked-sat down.
  10. clutch-hold tightly. 

Information the author gave to create a picture in our minds:
  • Peered at the greenish yellow slime.
  • We waited for the ebb tide to uncover the Pipi beds.
  • Jim, Brian, and I set off for the land.
  • blood trickles down my scalp.
  • Sinking her teeth into the fluffy yellow.

What did the author exaggerate?
Eggs being off. 
  • Aunt Neil wailed. 
  • Rotoura (stink)
  • Pinching her nostril's.
The author describes them like this because it makes a story out of a normal event.  The story sounds more interesting if the main events are exaggerated. 

Sea Gull attack.
  • blood trickling down.
  • with military precision.
  • like rain of bullets.
  • heart beating wildly 
Because it's the biggest problem in the story.  The story has been building up to this event.  It makes the story sound good.

So: What makes a good moment in time story?
-       Lots of descriptive detail
-       Exaggerating the main events
-       Add a few descriptive bits that sound funny / add  bit of background information.
-       Choosing good, specific vocabulary.



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